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What Happened? - Part 1 by =Kira73:iconKira73:


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Update : For those of you watching me but not :iconpenfury:, I put the link to the next part in here for you all to follow. It's getting creeepy.

This was started by :icondarcknyt:, dA's master of suspense, and I thought it would be fun to continue this. Here's his dealio ...

In 300 words of fewer, capture the narrator's voice and carry this forward. Come back here and CLAIM YOUR SPOT IN LINE!

I.e., comment that you will be FIRST, or SECOND if someone else is already first, or THIRD if the other two slots are taken, etc.

Then, when the person in front of you finishes THEIR part, you write yours BASED ON EVERYTHING THE OTHERS HAVE DONE, INCLUDING THIS OPENING. There IS NO CHANGING ANYTHING TO SUIT YOUR OWN FANCY. You have to write with what's already there.

Link to the part before yours and after yours in the body of the piece (if you don't know how to write the html for that note me and I'll explain).


I went a tad over 300 words, but not by much. And I suck at present tense, so feel free to point and laugh if I fudged this.

So ... who is next?

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:icondarcknyt:
Great job! I like it! I'll put the link in my piece right now to point to this one! :)

Bravo for playing along! Have a great weekend!

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JDT :batman:
My Blog

Now faith is the assurance of things hoped for, the conviction of things not seen. -Heb. 11:1
:iconpaintedbluerose:
I want to do it, you know I do. I just feel... I won't be any good at it. I mean, you guys-all of you-are amazing and talented and I'm not so much. (to put it kindly.) But, if killing's involved, you know I can do that. ;)

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When I see you, I smile. When you talk, I'm speechless. When you walk, I stare. What can I say... retards amuse me. :)
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You’re like our brother. :no: Step brother. :no: Weird kid down the street who eats nothing but mayonnaise on saltines. :nod:
:iconbpc73:
Well - I struggle with this story since this is not written in your usual voice.

I guess that what the challenge was. Also having the story start out with a description of vomit after tonight --- well not high on my list of subjects to read about.

I am curious to see where this story goes

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You don't take a photograph, you make it.
Ansel Adams
:iconkira73:
Not too bad for a piece done in about 15-20 minutes. It was hard to stop, though. You started an intriguing story.

You too. :D

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~Pararoms and romanticas~

Co-founder of #Genre7 ~ Genre fiction and critique.
:iconkira73:
Don't underestimate yourself like that ... you're better at this genre than I.

You and killing? Na! ;)

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~Pararoms and romanticas~

Co-founder of #Genre7 ~ Genre fiction and critique.
:iconkira73:
It's not, but I can't always be the romantic.

Puke ... yeah ... not high on my list either.

Me too. Thanks for reading hon.

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~Pararoms and romanticas~

Co-founder of #Genre7 ~ Genre fiction and critique.
:iconbpc73:
It's different even then the non-romantic work you do.

the darkness like an unforgiving knife, pointing at the source of the ashy smell.
Typically you don't use metaphors like this - this makes it seem like you are writing as a different person. I know you are trying to match Darc's voice.

:smooch:

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You don't take a photograph, you make it.
Ansel Adams
:iconmrsdarcknyt:
Whoa! What did you see, what did you see?!

I like how you carried this forward! I hope someone picks up the next part!

:clap:

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aka DarcsFalcon

My WP blog [link]
The Writers Nesst [link]

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:iconkira73:
I was trying to match his metaphoric style a bit, although he is a bit better than I at those.

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~Pararoms and romanticas~

Co-founder of #Genre7 ~ Genre fiction and critique.

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